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Place me not, within this ground
To hear no more, a mortal sound
Encumbered by earth, a twisted soul
Covered by death, in this devils hole

I scream, I cry, to no avail
A pity screech, a desperate wail
In this wretched place I be
No more to hear, no more to see

All mourners turn and walk away
Interned in darkness and forced to stay
This knoll is now my resting place
Dried tears are etched upon my face

Six feet under is now my home
No more to wander, no more to roam
A stone is laid upon my head
My body blanketed with a flower bed

Please visit me, although I'm gone
Our bodies wither,  but the soul lives on
In hearts of loved ones, for ever more
Dreams to keep and minds to store

Our lives are given as a gift
To help restore and give a lift
To those who shared our living days
In many forms and many ways

So I Rest in Peace with knowledge known
Of eternal slumber and seeds I've sown
I close my eyes and say farewell
To what was once my human shell
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:iconeon-zone:
I like this poem. 1. It's Poetic elements are good. 2. The rhyming is absolutely awesome. It sounds natural. 3. I like the flow and your transitions. 4. I like the concept you've done. Because most of the time it's the living's point of view not the dead one's. And so I say this is unique in some ways.

It's just that I disagree with the idea. No offense, I respect what you believe. But, I believe that the dead can't communicate with the living and vice versa. It's biblical.

But nonetheless, the pice is good poetically speaking.
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:iconwaterspirirtjess:
This gave me such a wonderful feeling...even though you write about both death and longing, I feel peace while reading your words. I think there's beauty in every new start we have, and to me death is just that...a new beginning. A birth. And while it's bittersweet, especially for those left behind, it brings so much to life just by its existence. You capture the beauty of both and for that I loved reading this wonderful poem.
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~LACYDRAWERS Dec 6, 2009  Professional Writer
Dearest Jess, you are 1 of my staunchest supporters and I am so glad to have you as my friend. I think of you often and pray that all is well in your part of the world. If any of my words bring you comfort then I know I have achieved what I set out to do...:iconsweetsugarcandies:
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Im a lunatic !:giggle: i came to say i put this in as a dev from you as my watcher & the other one is at the bottom lol .....duh :stupidme: yeah i remember this emote :stupidme: :giggle: hehehe!
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Hun ive just give you a massive plug in my big girl journal :woohoo: for vision in red !

your worth it & i enjoyed doing it for ya !
Talk soon sweetie !:glomp:
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~LACYDRAWERS Nov 29, 2009  Professional Writer
You are such a sweetheart Skya and a true friend and I loves Ya like a sister...:iconkokorox:
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Wow trudie ......thankyou.... well i do too very much ! your a lovely woman:iconiamimmortalbeloved:& i feel the same too so your stuck with me now lol !:iconiamimmortalbeloved:
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~LACYDRAWERS Nov 30, 2009  Professional Writer
Good!!!!!
I can live with that :iconlmaoffinplz:
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This wow ! Its brilliant !
Wow the way you make the reader envisage it in your words i mean it xxxxx
:iconchao-girl86:& it sounds like someone you may have lost, i know its personal but if its not then you have this amazing ability to put yourself in someone elses shoes & thats magical really xxx:iconfloatingheartplz:
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~LACYDRAWERS Nov 22, 2009  Professional Writer
Thank you so much Skya for reading my poems but also for commenting a little of yourself each time....:iconwuvplz::iconwuv2plz:
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